Summer Haiku 2008: Vacation Plans

Tuesday, June 3, 2008

vacation plans--
on the brochure cover
a garden like mine

Area 17 said...: Hi Megan,

I really like this! ;-)

Have you considered removing "making":

vacation plans--
on the brochure cover
a garden like mine

I think it makes it even stronger, and brings out the "haiku humour."

.; June 4, 2008 at 8:00 AM
Area 17 said...: ;-); June 5, 2008 at 7:59 AM